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Sorry Dad

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Over the years you’ve always been there,
In the shadows working away,
As the hidden elves toil for the Holidays,
Although there are many who receive praise before them,
They are the true reason that Christmas can ever come to be,
And yet, they make no remark or ask for anything in return,
As the years have passed and the seasons have changed,
I’ve learned and lost much,
I’ve forgotten the nurturing hand that feeds me daily,
I’ve forgotten the role model whose patience and wisdom is forever a shining light,
I’ve forgotten the idol that had bravely fought off the evils of the world around him,
more so then any action hero could accomplish,
I’ve grown and changed in many ways,
To treat this nurturer, idol, and model in such ruthless ways is unacceptable,
For that I’m deeply sorry,

Last night I dreamed an unsavory dream of a rat hiding in my bed,
It rustled through the sheets, just barely showing its effect on the bed as it nibbled at
the useful things of my room,
It attacked my bed and attacked all of those things that I enjoy,
The things that bring me reason, that bring me pride, that bring me happiness,
I woke up in this dream to find the rat still there,
Squirming about underneath the sheets and shifting through all the other materials that
lay on my bed,
But thankfully, this had only been a second dream,
I soon realized that the rat was not in my bed, but in my mind,
This accursed feeling of hatred, unfounded and simply detestable,
Eating away at my conscious, at the thoughts that bring me love,
Fleeing as I get up to capture it, kill it and toss it out,
But in doing so, hiding in the corners, unreachable until the time comes to ruin my
            mind once more,
To have such freakish dreams is to realize the pain that I have caused you and me and
the family last night
So I humbly ask your forgiveness.

Forgiveness that is like the rat in its undeserving nature,
Forgiveness which I don’t believe I could ever give with my lack of strength,
Forgiveness that must lie dormant in all of us if it lies anywhere at all,
Forgiveness that I have asked for in the past and now return in hope of,
Forgiveness that I implore you to show me because without this forgiveness,
My idol, my nurturer and my model will forever be out of reach to me.
Yay my first submission =o)
So I wrote this for my dad... and he liked it =o) So I decided I might give it a shot and see what people think. Harsh criticism expected and warranted =oP
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raziella's avatar
12th line should be than not then =P
I really enjoyed poem, though I had difficulty with the lines because I'm not very good at reading long lines but they fitted the rhythm well!
I agree with Madelief about the mushy thing going on too... but I only noticed it because she pointed it out. haha that damn girl
Sorry it took so long to critique I'm crap
xxx